Okay, the bothersome passages are getting there, but I’m still quite unsatisfied.
Part of the problem that interests me is the shift from the cheesy, honky-tonk, and really kind of funny tone of the first part into the “woman scorned” fury of the second part. What I have at the moment is tremendous, sound-wise, and I think what I’m trying to suss out is what kind of motivation I’m trying to assign to the mezzo. Does she really need the snare drum roll and the explosive tam-tam to make this work? Does it work? I don’t know yet.
Anyway, I’m posting what I’ve got. It’s not right, and it’s not finished.
In other news, I will probably finish the flagstone around the firepit today. Photos later.